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摘要:每場(chǎng)雅思考試之后,新航道上海學(xué)校 雅思頻道小編會(huì)第一時(shí)間分享雅思考試小作文范文及解析,希望對(duì)各位備考考生們有所幫助,對(duì)雅思寫作有所提高!本文是6月29日雅思小作文范文及解析。
每場(chǎng)雅思考試之后,新航道上海學(xué)校 雅思頻道小編會(huì)第一時(shí)間分享雅思考試小作文范文及解析,希望對(duì)各位備考考生們有所幫助,對(duì)雅思寫作有所提高!本文是6月29日雅思小作文范文及解析。
2019年6月29日真題題目
國(guó)內(nèi)A類:線圖
The graph below shows changes in percentage of households owning the car in the UK between 1975 and 2005.
高分范文及寫作解析
示范與破解 1
Introduction 略
Body 第1段
黑色為學(xué)生習(xí)作。橘紅色為教師修改。藍(lán)色為教師注釋講解。
The percentages of families owning one car and those owning more than two showed a similar trend over the 30 years. Portion of families having one car increased steadily from 40% in 1975 to 55% in 2005. The increase in the other number was slower, as the portion was just above 10% in 2005, 5% more than that in 1975.
描述數(shù)據(jù)本身(羅列數(shù)據(jù))
描述當(dāng)時(shí)的情況(事件感)
Both households with one car and those with more than two cars became proportionally more constantly; however, the ownership「找到這個(gè)主語(yǔ)句子的描述就多樣了」grew at different rates ←-從general pattern/trend 到 specifics- With a 15-percent increase, one-car ownership「找到這個(gè)主語(yǔ)句子的描述就多樣了」reached a rather high level (55 percent), and meanwhile, the percentage of households that own more than two cars remained at a fairly low level (10 percent) after a 5-percent increase. 「把數(shù)值放在括號(hào)里寫,句子的結(jié)構(gòu)就不會(huì)被破壞」
Body 第2段
Decreases in the portion of households with no car and those with two were at similar low rates in the first ten years. After 1985, however, households with no car became proportionally more, reaching 29 percent in 1985, but in the following ten years, their proportion dropped by 10 percent. Two-car ownership, on the other hand, remained decreasing and dropped to a fairly low level at 11 percent in 2005.
直接描述細(xì)節(jié)
先總述宏觀后挑選重要細(xì)節(jié),寫出“結(jié)構(gòu)感”
The 30-year period saw an overall slip in both of the other types of households. -先描述整條線的宏觀/總情況/general情況,寫出“事件感”,再按照時(shí)間順序描述細(xì)節(jié)-After a ten-year slow decrease, households with no car grew proportionally to nearly 30 percent – the original level, while the proportion of those with two cars continued falling and fell to roughly 15 percent. During the subsequent years, a further slide occurred to the two-car ownership, and there was a fall in the other ownership.
Conclusion 略
示范與破解 2
The chart illustrates the change of how many cars are owned per household in the UK over a 30-year period from 1975 to 2005.
Owning only one car was always the commonplace among UK families. 「寫法上注意避免機(jī)械描述數(shù)據(jù),而寫出“陳述一個(gè)發(fā)生過(guò)的(歷史)事件”的感覺(jué)。」This type of ownership already accounted for 40 percent in 1975, and more than half of the UK households owned one car 30 years later. Similar to 「邏輯關(guān)系的體現(xiàn)」 this type of ownership, owning more than two cars also had a growing / an upward trend. 「如果可以寫出話語(yǔ)感比較好而不像純粹介紹數(shù)據(jù),分?jǐn)?shù)更好」However, the difference 「邏輯關(guān)系的體現(xiàn)」 is that the proportion of households with more than two cars grew slowly and stayed at low levels (from 5 percent to 10 percent). 「難得出現(xiàn)純粹數(shù)據(jù)描述樣式的措辭」
On the contrary, the two-car ownership is decreasing, with the percentage dropping by half on the original level (25%), and the period from 1985 to 1995 witnessed the most marked decrease (8%). In addition,「不要把線切碎」having no cars became even less common overall by a 10-percent decrease, despite a slight increase during 1985 and 1995.
Overall, the UK 「還未使用過(guò)的主語(yǔ)」 saw a continuous increase in the households’ car possession over the years.
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