2021/4/15 13:25:18來源:新航道作者:新航道
摘要:上海新航道托福培訓小編特別整理了首場考試的詳情,這次給大家帶來了寫的關于2021年4月10日托福獨立寫作范文及解析。希望幫助考生對照文本更好的研究真題,充分備考,爭取理想成績,實現留學夢想。
上海新航道托福培訓小編特別整理了首場考試的詳情,這次給大家帶來了寫的關于2021年4月10日托福獨立寫作范文及解析。希望幫助考生對照文本更好的研究真題,充分備考,爭取理想成績,實現留學夢想。
2021年4月10日托福獨立寫作
【考場題目回憶】:
Your friend is going to reduce the living expenses.
Which of the following way would you recommend to your friend and why?
- Find a roommate that can share the living expenses.
- Buy the new technology products less frequently.
- Shop for less expensive food to cook at home.
【Introduction】
Going through the three options, reduced shopping for new tech products may be crossed off the list immediately. it does help to save money—in fact, perhaps thousands per year; however, if this friend of mine is not a tech fan, who chases the latest updates of tech products, it would not help much since such shopping is not a regular thing. At this point, the choice has been narrowed down: to find a roommate or to cook at home, and I would not recommend home-sharing.
【本段解析】:
開頭段落不僅僅說明了題目的內容,也干脆直接否定掉了第二個選項。
如果想要在開頭段落里直接否定一個選項,需要三言兩句就說出一個非常有力的理由去否定。
比如這里的“購買電子設備不是日常行為,所以難得買一次的東西,其實也不是絕對意義上的節省日常生活開支”。
【Body】
Home-sharing can destroy the life of this friend. This is as serious as it sounds. It is never easy to find a person who you feel comfortable with under the same roof, and a wrong person can cause sufferings. Some people may think that for the sake of the reduced rent for sure, the reduced utility bills perhaps, and even the reduced petrol cost if the two persons can carpool, they would have tolerance to the wrong person. But to think is easy and to actually have the tolerance is not. Not only would the wrong co-tenant make the home-sharing life unpleasant on the mood, they would even increase living expenses.
【本段解析】:
這一段開始否定選項一。但是沒有直接排山倒海來一大段理由,而是先讓步說一下,然后再一句話反駁。
那么,具體的反駁的理由留在了下一段集中陳述。這樣的段落分配方式比較好。避免了因某一個段落過分長而讓讀者在長篇幅中感到不舒服的情況。
【Body】
My personal experience teaches a lesson that the tenant may have bad hygiene, making the common area of the house—the kitchen in particular—messy, greasy and dirty. The tenant also may have a wasteful lifestyle in the use of electricity and gas, and the bill-sharing situation would be reversed: it would be my friend, instead of the tenant, who shares the utility bill for the other--let me be clear: my friend would have no intention of taking advantage of the other person and certainly would not want to be taken advantage of. In this situation, if the extravagant co-tenant pays for only half of the usage—and this is the most likely allocation, since the usage by each individual in the house would not be precisely calculated, my friend would be paying more than his fair share. At this point, in what ways does home-sharing reduce the cost of living? As for the carpool, as is thought to be another benefit, what if the person is always a free rider?
【本段解析】:
這一段集中火力討論選項一的缺陷。具體的三個缺陷是一一針對上一段讓步內容中的三個點來討論的。這樣也使得兩個段落在內容上有聯系。
【Body】
So, I would recommend home-cooking and less eating-out or take-aways. First, unlike home-sharing, where the friend of mine would depend on another person, home-cooking saves money without that my friend would need another person’s help. 此處注意,其實并不需要就這句話里提及的比較展開討論,因為這個點已經非常清楚無需贅述。
Second, cooking at home can be considerably economical compared with eating out or buying take-away food. 這里需要把considerably economical的具體情況展開,三句到四句話就足夠了。
【本段解析】:
這一段肯定是集中討論選項三的合理性。分成了兩個點,第一個點是針對選項一的比較得出,第二個點是選項三本身確實可以省錢。
【Conclusion】
So, if my friend is going to reduce the cost of living, my advice is to economize on eating. And I am strongly opposed to sharing accommodation.
【本段解析】:
結尾段落短小精悍,點到為止,無需長篇大論。
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